I think that your song has a good structure.
I really like the samples that you used.
The melody is interesting and it is very well developed troughout the song, it grows good.
I like the intro, i think it songs good with the "you will taste defeat" line.
I just don't understand the bass line starting at 00:17.
The bass line is good, but in my opinion, (and its just my opinion...because everyone got their own taste...) i don't think that the distortion used works good troughout the song.
I tried to hear your song with 2 different headphones and what i found was that at 00:43 (at the song's buildup) you just hear noise. I don't know if that noise was your point, but it gets annoying to hear, because the song's composition is really good and then you just kill it with all this distortion.
It's not easy to equalize a song when you work with synths that are heavily distorted, i know that by experience, but we have the mission to find out how to control this kind of issues if we are trying to make music.
Try to equalize the song and you'll have here something really cool.
At least i can see that you have good, really good potential.
Work it out! :)
Cheers.